11/13/2017 57 Comments Setting the SceneThis week, we will begin our exploration of fiction elements. As we prepare to study setting, we will stretch our creative writing muscles and bring a setting to life. Start by finding an image online that depicts a given setting. The image can be a photograph of a real place that you’ve visited, or a picture of any environment that inspires a story. Write a 8-10 sentence description of this setting. Write your description as it were an excerpt from a longer narrative that provides exposition to establish setting. Include details that help your reader visualize the setting clearly.
Provide a link to the image that inspired your story. The link cannot be to any social media site or other website that would be blocked on school computers. The content should be school appropriate. There are three examples below: https://ak2.picdn.net/shutterstock/videos/1037482/thumb/2.jpg https://s3.amazonaws.com/plugpolo/poloup/up/7/7d3/7d3dc95d2a82465bb2fe3ccfc71b01fd/img1.jpg http://cdn.costaricaexperts.com/wp-content/uploads/2014/05/Most-Popular-Costa-Rica-Beaches.jpg To make comments this week, you will select two setting descriptions to read. DO NOT LOOK AT THE PHOTOGRAPH UNTIL AFTER YOU READ THE SETTING DESCRIPTION. Read your peer’s description, then look at the picture, and in response, compare how you visualized the setting with the real thing. Discuss what details in their description helped you visualize the image in a way that was similar too or different from the actual image. Add any ideas you had that could help develop this into a full story!
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Karon Teat
11/13/2017 06:01:13 pm
This place...this place where creatures seem to arise from the waters. This place where unknown secrets lay on its floor. This is the place where little children come to play and never return. It’s waters are an eerie green. It has become the forbidden place in the town of Hawkins yet, the most mysterious. Ever since Barbs “disapearance” it has become the holding place of her last sighting. Is she still in this place... we may never know. Not even her closest friend Nancy truly knows. They were framed for her disappearance when “it” holds all the fault. It’s still lurking in those waters, waiting for it’s next victim.
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Annie Elburn
11/15/2017 08:34:24 pm
KARON! As soon as I saw the word "Barb", I knew that you were talking about the Upside Down from Stranger Things, which is my favorite show of ALL FLIPPIN' TIME. You described the setting so well! When I first watched the show, I was really scared of the Upside Down because I was scared about what it would be like to go there, especially with the Demogorgan lurking in the shadows! I'm sure the way you described it might influence some people to watch it.
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Dane Stone
11/16/2017 03:20:10 pm
because I have already watched season 1 of stranger things I already new what the pool looked like. BUT because of how you described it I didn't know it was the pool until you said Barb's disappearance because of the way you described it. I liked how you called the "Demogorgon", It. One way you could improve it, is that you could describe How barb disappeared.
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Madison Palmer
11/16/2017 03:39:29 pm
I imagined the setting very well. I love Stranger Things, so it was imagined just like it was described. I couldn’t make out details until I saw the picture. However, it was very clearly explained for the most part besides my initial thought of an ocean before realizing it was from stranger things.
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John Rodriguez
11/18/2017 10:07:26 pm
Karon I didn't see that at all I thought of something completely different. I seen this show before so I see what you wanted to show us with your writing. When i read it i thought you wrote about the upside down pool as you explain it that way. I believe that if you talk more about Steve house the writer would had thought it was normal dimension. This writing wright here can easily become a book. This could be done by adding a few sentences about the characters like Nancy and add others like Steve. Another thing is you could have talk about what happen to the friend like did she get lost or did something get to her. Another thing is that there should be away to get lost into that other place. This would have added more tension and drama to the story.
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Breanna Moir
11/19/2017 07:45:04 pm
I love Stranger things! I imagined Steve's pool once you got more descriptive. I wasn't sure though if it was stranger things until I hit the link. You never thought one place like a pool that you're suppose to have fun at would leave you haunted. Especially since it was the last place anyone saw Barb one of Nancy's best friends. I'm sure any time Nancy went to Steve's house she felt guilty in a way since that was the last place anyone last saw barb. Personally after everything that happened in that show I wouldn't ever want to see that pool or woods again since the demogorgon stayed in that very woods and took barb straight from that pool.
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Fernando
11/14/2017 06:46:13 pm
There is a place that is special to me in a way. Animals could be seen year-round from spring to winter, from a baby to an adult. I walk there many times and the bridge makes it a eye catching place. You could play their and have fun from young to old. This place actually got flooded a couple of times and I was surprised the first time as I never saw it get flooded. When events happen it is totally different. Full of tents and trailers from games to contest. There is a type of animal where there is a lot of. They could be vicious in the spring and calm in the fall. They are feathery and rhymes with muck. Its a very calm place as there isn't a lot of noises except for cars, the sound of the animals and the water running. It is moist in the spring and in the winter you could ride your sled there. The link might spoil it as its in the link but if you read it before you read this post it basically takes the fun out of it.
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John Rodriguez
11/18/2017 10:39:32 pm
Fernando I did see what you wanted to show us. As fast that you started talking of the bridge i notice that it was from that part. The main reason i notice this was as i ben there before. This shows that if your in the place the author talks about you have a better understanding of what his talking about. Well as you wrote it in a really personal way i got to see multiple things about your feeling toward the park which would really help in a book. If you wrote a book you could make a character that was like you and give him your feelings to make it more realistic and relative. Another thing you could have done was add more detail to the actual zoo then mainly talk about what happens year around. This would had help with the image in that comes to ones brain when you talk about it. So the last thing i have to say is that you did a great job with this and i enjoy reading it.
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Matthew Waggoner
11/14/2017 07:20:22 pm
I walked down the path, the snow crunching beneath my feet with each heavy step I took. Despite the cold being nearly unbearable, I could barely focus on it, as the loud chattering of my teeth preoccupied my mind. Frozen water vapor leaked out of my lips in time with my labored breaths. My situation was undesirable, to say the least, but the thought of steaming hot chocolate and 20 dollars kept me going. Earlier that day, at about 10 in the morning, my friend had called me, asking if I could make the treacherous walk to his house to provide him with help shoveling his driveway. He even claimed that his mother was willing to pay me, but this claim was, at best, dubious. Nevertheless, I continued on my daring trek, determined to reach his house. When I was about a quarter of a mile away from his house, small flakes of snow began falling. Though I knew it was childish, I reflexively opened my mouth and stuck out my tongue, trying—and failing—to catch some of the tiny snowflakes. Giggling to myself, I once again continued down the road. The snow began to pick up, as did the bitter winds. It felt as though the wind was strong enough to pick me up. The snow started falling in neat white sheets, mercilessly bombarding me. After another minute of blizzard-like conditions, the road was practically invisible. In fact, if I had put my hand in front of my face, I'm certain I wouldn't have been able to see it. My situations seemed hopeless, but I was convinced that I was almost there. I could see the outline of the house, mere yards away. I shouted triumphantly, and at that very moment, I was struck with full force by a silver SUV. Unbeknownst to me, I had been walking in the middle of the road. The time I spent mid-air seemed to last an eternity. They say that when you die, your life flashes before your eyes. Let me put it bluntly. It doesn't. As I hit the ground, my brain registered two things. The agonizing pain shooting throughout my body and the unforgiving coldness of the fresh snow. After panicking for a moment, I realized what was happening to me. The coldness was contrasted by a sudden warmness under my back. As the life drained from my body, I closed my eyes, and was content with my fate. The last thing I felt before I passed beyond this planet was the now gently falling snow.
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mikayla somers
11/15/2017 07:47:29 pm
Dude, I saw that, like for real ! That's crazy how you did that, you described it perfectly! I'm surprised, I would have never expected something like this out of you. I'm very impressed, Matthew, well done.
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ZJ Cutrara
11/14/2017 09:14:12 pm
As if trapped in a storm cloud, everything is consumed by the freezing abyss. Below freezing, winds whipping the frozen rain shards through the trees with a great howl. Looking around one might say it felt like they were frozen in time, traffic stops, blinded by the storm, it consumes all. Headlights from the once passing traffic now slowed to a stop look as if they were eyes peering through fog, predator watching prey. The road once black tar now white with snow. Now woke to a reality that man can not always control mother nature, you feel trapped, FROZEN IN TIME. A memory that will never be forgotten.
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Sephora Frejuste
11/14/2017 10:06:07 pm
The birthplace of reggae music, Usain Bolt, OMI, and Bob Marley. Many people would love to see this breath-taking, eye-catching, and tropical environment, but may not have the opportunity to. Here you can always find peace while looking at the still, cool, transparent water. Once you go it is Unforgettable. You can always go there if you want to see a different scenery. An island surrounded by water is about how good it can get. Part of the Caribbean islands, there is always much to see and many things to do. Known for its diving and snorkeling sites, it's an amazing place to visit.
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Fernando Lopez
11/18/2017 10:38:04 am
When i first read this I thought about a tropical island with some rivers. Then I saw the picture and it was very close to what I thought it was. A nice blue river with people in boats. What helped me visualize the place was when you said tropical environment and transparent water. What messed me up a little was when you said "part of the carribean islands" because I thought of an island and realized thay it was a river. I also thought of a beach but I knew it wasn't that.
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Kailey Moyers
11/15/2017 05:27:47 pm
Behind a wire fence lies an abandoned, decaying, three-story brick house. The house may have been through a lot, but it still has character. Before the damage, the architecture of the home must have been beautiful. Now, the yard is uncared for and messy. The collapsing house looks as if it’s been vacant for decades. The shingles are falling off the roof, and the bricks are falling apart. The left portion of the house has wood and insulation peeking through. The windows are all boarded up and broken, leaving no place to see inside the house.
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Fernando Lopez
11/18/2017 10:44:56 am
This made me think of a broken up haunted house. Then I saw the picture and it wasn't a haunted house but a abandoned house. It's looks like it's about to collapes which concerns me. What help me visualize was why you stated that the house was boarded up and the falling apart of several things. What threw me off was when you said "collapsing house" because I thought the house was already collapsed a little and the house was near to be fully collapsed.
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Carli Jett
11/18/2017 06:09:58 pm
This description had made a lot of imagery. When you said, "..abandoned, decaying, three-story brick house," it had brought most of the imagery. I could see the bricks falling off of the house in this ghost town type place. Also when you said, "The windows are all boarded up," it had the second most imagery. I could see the broken windows covered fully and the darkness that filled the inside. I could almost see the picture in my head, the way it is.
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John Rodriguez
11/15/2017 06:30:20 pm
Trees standing tall on a cold and windy night. With there leaves flying into a great darkness that awaits. Moon shines bright red as if it were a ruby as the darkness stand tall. Walking forward as it were a human. He stair at the rain of ashes that fell on him on the others. With his for long arms he touched the ground as it were sand. This all happens under us all will we sleep and will we walk. This is what other seen and others don't.
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Rebecca Dartilus
11/15/2017 06:53:57 pm
As I walk bare foot on the soft sand. I can hear the the the sound of the ocean waves always so calming. The water was so clear that you could see everything beneath it. As I get closer to the ocean floor I could feel how warm the water was. Looking up to the bright yellow sun I could feel the heat hit my face. Looking back down at my feet I could see that the water is now up to my knees. Deciding it was finally time to go home I I crapped my stuff and left. Not before I noticed how beautiful it all looked from afar.
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Paul Yang
11/15/2017 06:54:00 pm
There is this place almost in every large state with bright colors and forever lasting noises. This place is where people from young to old can have fun and spend time with their family. This place is open every day yearly round with water splashes and screams from those having fun with their family. Accidents are not failsafe to not happen with a chance of one person dying in every 24 million people. This location attracts millions of people around the world while also having serious injuries and deaths that are critical. This special place also has things with names that show what they are with many similar ones, but with different names. The things in this location can be scary for those who forbade heights with tremendous speeds causing screams and laughs to be heard distances anyway to release stress or tension. This is the place where fun and happiness is seen throughout with laughs and screams.
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Rebecca Dartilus
11/18/2017 10:05:46 pm
When I was reading I quickly realized that this was a amusement park. When you said that there could be injuries but also fun at just one place that's when it hit me. It also hit me when you said "Forbade heights with tremendous speeds causing screams and laughs" i realized you were speaking of roller coaster. When I was going to the link I saw that park of the link said six flags. That's when I knew I was rights. Exactly as I pictured I saw the colorful images of the rides. I saw the roller coasters that you were referring to. When i looked at the picture I could almost see the people laughing and screaming on the rides.
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Gage Sabater
11/18/2017 11:04:23 pm
At first I visualized a theme park or a water park of some sort. Mostly because of the fact that it said bright colors and lots of fun. And that it said that it rarely had any occurring accidents and that if it did than it would be serious/life ending. When I put thought into the death part, I thought of when some person`s handle bar thing didn't operate correctly and it killed them immediately or when a child was decapitated on a water ride. I was right! The picture was a theme park, this makes me feel accomplished now.
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ZJ Cutrara
11/19/2017 11:35:48 am
When I was first was reading this I had hard time imaging what it was. I first thought of a beach but as you dropped more hints to it actual being a amusement park. In fact even before I felt as if you were ever so slightly dropping hints and as you did my imagination starting building off one sentence to the next. From all these people dying and screaming to the "most wonderful place on Earth". What a very interesting choice of topic.
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Carli Jett
11/15/2017 07:34:25 pm
A journey made for only the brave, was assigned to me. The journey was to venture through the small towns of central Colorado and find the hidden sorcerer building titled Bishop's Castle. The day after I got assigned this journey, I was off from the autumn seasoned city of Canon City to the historic town of Westcliffe. The walk was difficult from angry drivers being stuck in traffic to the steepness increasing with every step I took. It was about thirty minutes later and all I could see were the colorful trees and the lovely blue spruce trees living upon the hillsides. Each time I took another step, the more lost and hopeless I felt. An hour later, I wanted to give up. Then suddenly, I see a sphere like figure floating above the woods in front of me. The floating sphere was getting larger as I grew closer. The sphere was a black wired cage, then it landed on something with a loud "BOOM!" I thought it had crashed, so I ran towards it, through the woods. Once I got to an opening made of two blue spruce trees and saw a castle with a sign saying "The Magic only happens here at Bishop's Castle!" and I knew for sure that this was it. It was a large castle made of tan rocks stacked one upon another with a woods of blue spruce around it. I stayed there for a week. went inside and was welcomed right away and A week later, I awoke in a blue and gold room with purple drapes among the windows in Bishop's Castle and decided that I shall stay here forever to wake up to the sunrise behind the mountains, the path of trees that leads to the mountains, and the large rock tunnel below.
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11/15/2017 07:54:27 pm
Within all the brick and stone there is a majestic place. A place of love, care, and beauty. Unshrouded by the darkness and pollution of the city. Down the cobblestone steps and into this place you go. A place untouched by the fires of mankind; untouched by the colorless pages of your newspapers. A place hidden under the stain of color. A place of allurement locked away only to be opened by the most earnest and truthful love. The earthy cobblestone and trees keep the visitors cohered to mother Earth. The pink leaves embody the love of the visitors; vibrant, playful, but also delicate. Across the sky's and within the trees lay the white lanterns beckoning the visitors with their golden glow. Throughout this place the visitors roam like ghost, frisking about, hoping to find the radiant love they once had.
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Kilee Taylor
11/15/2017 08:04:04 pm
This place, is one of the most beautiful you will ever see. The ocean has two shades of blue, one clear and the other dark. The two sections are separated by a line of rocks, the look white from the waves constantly hitting them. Right along the edge of the light blue is a beach, with sand the color of brown with a touch of yellow. Surrounding the water is a curved line of mountains, that ends after the water is clearly separated. The mountains are mostly green that fades into brown the farther out in the water it gets. The bottom of the mountains appear to be white as well, due to the constant rush of waves hitting it. All along the beach are palm trees and people lined up to go swim in the beautiful water.
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Jocelyn Miltz
11/18/2017 11:46:24 am
In the beginning sentences I imagined a setting with a waterfall like Niagara falls. I imagined the "line of rocks" to be the cliff of the waterfall. As soon as I finished reading that I read the next sentence and my theory was incorrect. The next thing I imagined was a more accurate representation. The distinct color difference that you emphasized gave me a mental image of a little piece of land that was enclosed by water and cut in half my a small mountain. I imagined it to look a lot like "The Island of Tafiti" from Moana or the island from the "Lava" song short film. I love the use of colors and prepositional phrases that you used to explain the setting. Great job Kill-ee :)
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Sephora Frejuste
11/18/2017 10:40:41 pm
When i first read this it thought of the Jamaican beaches. But when i finally looked at the picture it reminded me of the Disney movie "Moana". When you started to say things like most beautiful water 2 different shades of blue, curved line of mountains, reminded me of the part where Moana first met Maui. Seeing the picture made me realize that you really were writing about Hawaii because i can really imagine the clear waters and people getting ready to run in the water.
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Dong Lee
11/15/2017 08:12:27 pm
This is a cabin in a small suburban area, a place where a happy family once lived together and a place where love filled the air. Once a place where birds sang in harmony. A place where kids joined together in the grass in front of the house, and played until the sun went down. Now it is a place where the sun never reaches and screams of agony fills the area. Nobody knows what happened to the family that once lived in this cabin. Now the place, full of mysteries and pain. The cabin, once beautiful now broken to its foundation. Now a place where people who have searched for theIr loved ones disappear, a place where no one dares to go near.
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Sanai Brown
11/16/2017 08:51:56 pm
When I read your excerpt based on your picture your words immediately made me imagine a small beautiful cabin that once was a home to a beautiful family. But when you started your sentence with "now it is" I knew that there was going to be a change in story, those three little words developed a feeling of suspense. I really liked what you did because when I saw the picture I immediately imagined the sun shining over the house with a family all around but then coming back to reality seeing why you said "now it is"... so good job.
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Paul Yang
11/18/2017 05:27:03 pm
As I was reading this I imagined a loving house that turned into a haunted house that no one dares to go near. After reading it I opened the link and I was surprised that I was somewhat correct. At first, I was thinking about Halloween, like how some people make their house look like a haunted house scarring the kids with a loving heart. After reading the fourth and fifth sentence I had totally changed my imagination because it was worst than what I thought it was at first. The fourth and fifth sentence made the setting darker and creepier with suspense towards what happened to the family who had once lived with happiness. I imagined a haunted house in the middle of no where when you said, “Now it is a place where the sun never reaches...,” because in a haunted area there is no sunlight with agony of fear. This was actually a great description of the setting because it had also created suspense for the reader.
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Rebecca Dartilus
11/18/2017 10:16:29 pm
At first I was imagining happiness but then you took that away from me. As I read further I imagined the cabin in the woods a forgotten place where no one goes to. Then you said people go there to look for their missing loved ones. This reminded me of one of those horror movies where no one wants to go to the scary looking house but they have to because they have something that flew in there by the wind. when I looked at the link it said it was a house in the swamps that's when I realized that this might really be like the movies. But when I saw the picture I realized that i was wrong. This is not like in the movies that I imagined. It was like those movies where a family leaves their house and never goes back to it. A house where it is forgotten but remembered by that one person who tries to bring the place back together. One of those houses that will always be a distant memory to all but one.
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Gage Sabater
11/18/2017 11:11:26 pm
Ok, that was a rollercoaster of emotions. I thought back to "The Cabin in the Woods." At first they had all fun and then boom, everyone is dead ( I've only seen the first 30 minutes, I'm sorry if I'm wrong, the disc was scratched). But like the cabin was actually really weathered and eroded. The cabin that I have imagined also had bloodstained walls and tattered police tape that has been there for a while. The time of truth. I imagined mine in the woods but your picture is in a field with a sunny sky, a great place to murder a poor family! And it also was a lot more nicer looking than the one I imagined.
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Mikayla Somers
11/15/2017 08:22:14 pm
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Carmen Broadwater
11/15/2017 08:36:03 pm
Leaves shades of oranges, yellows, and reds blanket the cold fall ground of the lonely forest. Only when the leaves run thin is where you can find the dark patches of grass. Still, a dip remains in the middle of the forest from a used pathway, off to the sides are huddles of tall tress that connect to the sky, from the trees are the bare arms shooting out for any glimpse of sun light. Above you see the green branches that have gobbled up all of the sun, between the trees bits of light spill onto the leaves letting strips and pieces glisten. Although, the path is long forgotten, no weeds , moss, or over grown trees dare to disturb the tranquil peace that still runs through these paths. Contrasts of darkness and the light create a picture of hope, farther along the path, fog consumes the trees and turns the path into nothing.
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Annie Elburn
11/15/2017 08:47:23 pm
One of my favorite places on the entire planet. The song is true, this place sure is "one heck of a town." Sometimes while walking down the busy streets and through the subway fog, you see a pigeon munching on a half-eaten hot dog from a nearby street vender. Down the street, in the night time, all you can hear is the probably thousands of people's conversations and the honking of taxis going down the street. Bright lights surround you promoting a Disney store or a popular musical or a McDonald's Big Mac. Turn the corner and you see many bright lights that tell the names of theaters: Richard Rogers, St. James, Imperial, The Music Box, August Wilson. You look up at the bright lights and see the fans waiting outside a theater, to possibly catch a glimpse of the actor or actress they had just seen perform. You are home.
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Sephora Frejuste
11/18/2017 10:50:29 pm
Right when you said " A half-eaten hot dog from a near by street vender." New York City popped in my head. The busy night streets and city lights all enter my mind thinking about New York. I think that this is good and don't need to add anything. While reading this there is enough information that even if you have the slightest idea about anything in New York City, you could probably still guess that you were talking about that place. I love the end where after giving the details you add " You are home."
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Madison Palmer
11/15/2017 08:55:23 pm
I creep slowly down the winding path of twisting trees, where it opens into a clearing. This area has a much different feeling rather than the path's creepy aura. This area radiates a much deeper, darker, malevolent energy. The is sky a dark grey, dusty brown shade, with not a cloud in view. A rusted, old merry-go-round stands out from the surrounding environment. Faded shades of red, and muddled shades of white in a pattern. It seems like it has been here for decades, but somehow the lights are still functioning properly. An eerie silence lingers in the air, with only the sound of my staggered breaths. Suddenly, the silence was broken by the faint sound of carnival music. It slowly grew louder and louder until I held my hands over ears. Then, it stopped, followed by a creaking sound. The merry-go-round began to slowly turn, as I stare at each of the blank faces of the identical horses. http://img02.deviantart.net/158d/i/2013/260/c/9/merrygoround_in_creepy_carnival_by_chisatowatanabe-d6mquhu.jpg
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Kayla Thornton
11/18/2017 11:00:50 am
When I first read your post, I imagined a merry go round in the middle of a forest with a path to the side. I imagined a few trees surrounding the merry go round. I saw the dark gray sky and I imagined red and white stripes on the merry go round. I saw the horses slowly turning, each one looking the same as the one before. I heard the loud creaking as the merry go round moved.
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Jocelyn Miltz
11/18/2017 01:59:53 pm
You have such a strong vocabulary that it really helps me better visualize this spooky setting. You use some very unique words in order for me to interpret the setting. I visualized something similar to Melanie Martinez's "Carousel" music video or part of the ending to the "Goosebumps" movie. At first I could imagine some dark, mysterious music to be playing faintly in the background, but once you got to the part of your "staggered breaths" I legitimately got chills and I felt like I could hear the silence. The uncertain and spooky setting you established created an uneasiness in me and I was genuinely frightened. Great job Maddi!
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Gavin Wawrzeniak
11/18/2017 03:59:51 pm
Quite the creative description. You matched the "creepy" environment very well with the faded colors and the description of the merry-go-round. When I read this, I imagined the character (or you) in an entire carnival, or amusement park, but that was just me assuming that there was more to the scene. After reading it a second time after looking at the picture, I see that you described the setting in the picture perfectly. I really liked how you even added more to it by making the merry-go-round start moving.
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Gage Sabater
11/15/2017 09:26:36 pm
The last noise heard here was a large boom, almost like a clap of thunder, but louder. What was once a thriving civilization is now but inhabitable pieces of charred rock. The sky, now darkened by the smoke of large fires in the distance. Imprinted shadows on concrete were left, depicting some of many lost here. The vast empire now reduced to what some call an island, surrender to the superior power of the land. The bystanders now accept the fate that they will receive 3 days later. Survivors wear these memories, some die because of them. The feeling that the event implied on these people were neither hope nor sympathy, but fear.
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Gavin Wawrzeniak
11/18/2017 04:09:19 pm
Wow.... What impresses me the most about this is that you didn't just describe the setting, you gave a description of what was happening and what would soon happen after. It makes you imagine what's going on at that moment. It's not just creating a picture for the reader, but a story. When I read it, I was imagining what was going on as if I were there, so I wasn't very close to the image that you chose. This could be the beginning of a book if you wanted it to be.
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Paul Yang
11/18/2017 04:55:49 pm
As I was reading your post, in my mind I immediately thought of the aftermath of the atomic bomb that happened in 1945 on the island of Hiroshima. Surprisingly, I had guess the setting correctly after I had opened the link and saw what the real picture was. The main description that had helped me figure out that it was when you said “here was a large boom... like a clap of thunder, but louder.” In my mind when I read this I imagined a large boom bursting on Earth with a huge explosion annihilating every living thing in its way. At first when I read the first few sentences of what you wrote I imagined 9/11 where the planes flew with tremendous speed towards the buildings like a large bomb detonating itself. As soon as I read the fifth sentence I had changed my imagination because it was about a bomb that had detonated on an island. After reading it, I immediately thought of what happened to island of Hiroshima in Japan where the U.S detonated a bomb on.
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Brayden luers
11/15/2017 09:41:17 pm
Under the bright lights that are beaming down on me. Screams coming from every direction, complete madness. No one knows what the outcome is going to be but everyone knows it’s going to be intense. The heavy rain drenches everyone watching but the fans are unfazed. Everything lies on this one night. It’s the coldest it has ever been and all the people are refusing to leave. This is a must see event. Then all of a sudden it all goes black. Panic is set upon the viewers. No one knows what happened or what’s going on. There is running everywhere. Then the lights are cut back on and the score shocks the whole world.
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Sanai Brown
11/16/2017 09:14:30 pm
When I first started to read I thought that you were talking about an asylum but then when you said that "panic is set upon the viewers" I thought of it as the Roman games in the colosseum. But when I reread it and thought about what you liked so much which was baseball it all came to me that you were writing about a baseball game that disappoints a lot of viewers and fans. And your picture confirmed my theory especially with the caption on the picture.
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Mikayla somers
11/18/2017 01:58:32 pm
I could not only see what you were talking about but I could faintly hear the screaming and ‘complete madness’ you described. I really like how you went for something sports related. It matches your personality well. Your post did very well with expressing the details, good job Brayden!!
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Breanna Moir
11/15/2017 09:57:13 pm
As I walked along the beach after the storm I could see the horrendous aftermath. Before the storm the beach was so beautiful and you always wanted to be there, But one day that all changed when a dark filled storm came through. During the storm that once beautiful beach was destroyed, houses were scattered throughout the beach. Some people even got hurt in the process of destruction. As I was walking along the beach only my foot prints could be seen because everyone other persons were washed away. The beach was lifeless there was no laughter, screaming, or people. All of it was gone as if it had never happened. I have never seen the beach so lifeless the only thing around were other peoples belongings that were once with them. A beach can be just like a person it only takes one storm to destroy and take away and take away the people that were once with you.
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Jocelyn Miltz
11/15/2017 09:59:04 pm
A colorful darkness fell over the sleepless city. Everywhere I look I see creations’ handiwork in the rounded hill tops of mountains and the essence of life. The wonderful wind seeming to breathe life into the abundance of trees. From North, South, East, and West anyone can journey on these golden bridges to experience a new and more uncommon culture. The tall intrusive buildings seeming to penetrate the clouds. Each monstrous architectural creation seemed to envelope its presence around me. Every light, bright in its very own unique way seemed to be telling a mysterious story. Red, the story of fire and bloodshed. Blue, the depth and intensity of stability and strength. Orange, the experiences of joy and the balance of encouragement and warmth. Everything encompassed by the serene stillness of the conjoining of 3 rivers in the still city.
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Will Schmidt
11/15/2017 10:01:59 pm
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Paige Faulkner
11/15/2017 10:02:37 pm
The landscape was beautiful. A vast expanse of mountain range stretched across the horizon. A blanket of fog hugged the mountain caps, shrouding them in a mist. The sunset filled the skies with vibrant, vivid colors. Orange, red, and yellow infused the skyline. The woodland lining the hillsides were a rich green. Bobcats would sneak through the shrubbery in search of their next meal, and black bears would traipse through the dense forestry in search of berries and roots. It is in this place I will lose myself, in this place I will escape all the thoughts that plague my mind... it is in this place I shall perish.
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Kayla Thornton
11/18/2017 10:19:24 am
When I read your post, the first thing that I imagined were the mountains. I saw a thick blanket of fog over the mountains. I imagined a swirl of colors in the sky, and the woods to the side of the mountains. When I looked at the picture, I saw that I was right. One detail I didn't add to my description is where the woods were in reference to the mountain (which side). When I saw the picture, I found that the woods were to the left of the mountains.
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ZJ Cutrara
11/19/2017 11:40:08 am
This beautiful imagine of something like Canada was built in my head. It's almost as if you painting a picture on a canvas only using words. One word is a building block for the other, I actually pictured something very similar to the picture. You did a very good job with creating a picture with the mountains and sunset. Hopefully I'd be able to read your short story.
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Jadyn Carroll
11/16/2017 11:49:21 am
The sky was strangely blue, contrary to the weather. I looked at the bench i usually sat on, i wouldn’t sit on it today , it would make me too cold. The trees were beautifully white. A set of trees laid behind them as well, all the other trees sat behind the lake, but the biggest one sat next to it. I’m surprised the lake wasn’t iced over, between the snow and the cold in general. A neighborhood was behind the trees. The only way you would know is if you were familiar with the area, all you could see was a white car. Even that blended in with the snow a little too much. The bushes around the trees were completely white, almost like it was out of a fantasy land. The snow was starting to melt in certain areas. But the snow made all the difference.
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Madison Palmer
11/16/2017 03:36:16 pm
I imagined the picture exactly like you described it. You described the setting very well. I could clearly imagine the sky as soon as you described its color. The snow in my mind was falling from the sky, like a blizzard.
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Carli Jett
11/18/2017 07:12:03 pm
Your description had great imagery. The imagery already started when you said, "The sky was strangely blue, contrary to the weather." I didn't know what type of weather that was going on, but I cold tell it was not a nice and sunny day. After you said, "the bench...would make me cold," I noticed that it might have been a snowy day or a chilly day. Also imagery appeared when you said, "The trees were beautifully white." With the blue sky, I could see the trees covered in snow.
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Gavin Wawrzeniak
11/16/2017 06:49:50 pm
The water was a translucent light blue color. It was extremely quiet... to the point where all I could hear was the sound of the water splashing, and the boat rocking. There was very little I could see from where I was, in the middle of the day, all I could see was the small outline of land ahead. I had nothing with me except my phone, and a few books. I began to decide whether I should pick one up to read, but I wanted to stare the beautiful scene ahead of me for a while longer. The sky was almost clear, with a few clouds above, but that made it better... it was calming.
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Bryanna DeRosa
12/30/2017 12:56:03 pm
As you walk, dragging your feet in the sun burned sand you hear laughter from all directions. Tall, short, chubby, skinny, white, black, Mexican, all different sizes, shapes and colors come together to have the best day of their life. You look out and see a dark blue, cold, deep, but yet brings happiness, ocean.You smell dough and salt and food. You hear screaming of joy from the big white coaster.
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